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 Hello, I am Book.
 
-You already know the twat who created me. He's the guy who can't keep his shit together long enough to start a business. That foreword you just read was all him. Idiot.
+You already know the guy who created me from that foreword, you might think he's silly, but he's alright.
 
-But I am Book! You will like me. 
+I am Book! You will like me. 
 
-It's going to take about <time> to read me through, but take it easy. That's just a suggestion calculated by some weird piece of software some guy probably wrote when he could barely see through the haze of caffeine.
+It's going to take about an hour, fifty-three minutes and nine seconds to read me through, but take it easy. Or fast. Either way, I suggest a nice cup of tea and a comfy chair.
 
-I don't trust software. But I do trust developers, programmers, software engineers or however else you want to call them. Those guys seem to change their preferred noun every two weeks.
+I am here to tell you I love programmers. Even though they sometimes prefer to be called developers, or software engineers, or computer scientists. Whatever _your_ favorite version likes to call themselves, go give them a hug. They're awesome folk!
 
-Have some tea. Or coffee. Glass of water?
-
-I'm going to teach you about being _the best_. The best programmer, or the person programmers like best. I have no idea which you need more, so I'll just show you both.
+They might seem a bit strange at first, but I'm going to help you be _the best_ person for programmers to be around. If you happen to be a programmer yourself, I'm going to tell you how to be the best programmer there is.
 
 ## Keep in touch
 
 Swizec is starting a newsletter about the things from Book. He's going to share interesting things about productivity, programmers, office culture and stuff like that about twice a month.
 
 Sign up at: [http://swiz.ec/nightowls-list](http://swiz.ec/nightowls-list)
 
-You can also poke swizec on Twitter as [@swizec](https://twitter.com/swizec) or send him an email at swizec@swizec.com. He loves hearing from people.
+You can also poke Swizec on Twitter as [@swizec](https://twitter.com/swizec) or send him an email at swizec@swizec.com. He loves hearing from people.
 
 ## Whom Book is for
 
-You should read me if you are a programmer or have to deal with those weirdos all the time. If you have to wait until 11am for your favorite programmer to show up at work, or your favorite programmer won't even come to bed until 3am regardless of how sexy your lingerie. Read me!
+You should read me if you are a programmer or have to deal with them a lot. If you've ever waited until 11am for one of them to show up at work, or couldn't get them in bed until 3am no matter how sexy you dressed. This book is for you!
 
-If you're a mum or a dad and your young padawan of a programmer is acting strange - stays up all night and sleeps through school. I'll tell you why. And no, it's not drugs, it's pure awesome.
+If you're a mum or a dad and have a pup programmer in the house, don't worry. I'll tell you all about why they stay up all night and sleep through school. It's because they're doing awesome things in their spare time ;)
 
-If one of your parents is a programmer and they keep making strange jokes. *"Yes mum, we know! The two hard things in computer science are cache invalidation, naming things, and off-by-one errors. Ha ha."*. I'll help you understand that one too.
+If one of your parents is a programmer and they keep making corny jokes like *"The two hard things in computer science are cache invalidation, naming things, and off-by-one errors. Ha ha."*. I'll help you understand that too.
 
 ## What Book contains
 
-I'm made up of roughly four sections.
+I have roughly four sections.
+
+First I'm going to talk about whether programmers do in fact work at night or do they just like to think they do. For some reason they really like bragging about how little sleep they got last night. Swizec is just like that!
 
-First I'm going to talk about whether programmers do in fact work at night or do they just think they do so they can brag for hours on end about how little sleep they need.
+Then I'm going to tell you _why_ they feel night-time is best time. Some things in the day-time just don't gel well with those guys, understanding will help you keep them at a minimum.
 
-Then we're going to go through some of the reasons they feel like night-time is the best time. I'll tell you what's going on and what's so hard about working during the day.
+Lastly, there's going to be practical stuff. Both for people around programmers as for programmers themselves. The very last section might be called *"Lifestyle tips for top productivity"*.
 
-Lastly, I'm going to share some practical stuff aimed at people who aren't programmers, but have to deal with them and some other stuff for programmers so they can get along with normal people better, or just get more out of the night.
+Everything you read here has been tried by somebody. Either Swizec or some of his close friends. None of that writing things that sound good on paper, but nobody can do. Only things that work are allowed.
 
 ## What is not in Book
 
-I am not hard science. You should take everything you read here with a grain of salt. While that Swizec guy did read a lot of academic papers on most things in here, he's also based a lot of it off anecdotal evidence and his and his friends' personal experiences.
+I am not hard science. Take everything with a grain of salt, if something seems strange, tell Swizec. If something doesn't work for you, tell Swizec. If something sounds downright dangerous, tell Swizec.
 
-He also sucks at keeping proper track of references. I try to smack him over the nose with a newspaper every time he cites something from a paper, but doesn't cite it properly. He rarely listens, but promises he'll try his best to get all of that in place.
+You should consider me a collection of anecdotes, personal experiences and interpretations of scientific literature on the topic.
 
 ## How finished is Book
 
-Swizec is lazy - he prefers the euphemism "busy" - so it's taking him forever to finish me. It feels like I'm missing a whole body! I want one of those lovely figures you see on TV ...
+Swizec seems to have a life outside this book so it's taking him a while to finish. You might still find some notes to himself, usually inside square brackets, or sections that clearly haven't seen an editor yet. He's very sorry about that and promises to get to it as soon as possible.
 
-If you are reading via [the Github repository](https://github.com/Swizec/nightowls), that's wonderful! Make sure to tell him what's wrong! Github Issues exist for a reason.
+If you are reading via [the Github repository](https://github.com/Swizec/nightowls), that's wonderful! Make sure to tell Swizec what's wrong! Github Issues exist for a reason.
 
 If you're reading via purchased pdf, that's _awesome_! You are a gentleman and a scholar and a great person to boot. Swizec asked me to say thanks for supporting the project.
 
 Right now I'm version 0.4.
 
-The interesting sections right now are **About flow** and **Working with programmers**. There's some interesting science about creativity and sleeping habits in **Why programmers work at night**.
+The most interesting sections are **About flow** and **Working with programmers**. There's some interesting science about creativity and sleeping habits in **Why programmers work at night**.
 
-The section of tips _for_ programmers was mostly written during long drives on a road trip around Europe. It's very interesting, but that lazy bastard still hasn't finished editing.
+The section of tips _for_ programmers was mostly written during long drives on a road trip around Europe. It's all very interesting and is probably the most well researched part of the book. But Swizec still needs to mark up the references and clean up the writing.
 
 If you're into data, you should check out the preliminary analysis in **Do programmers work at night?**. Some 500,000 Github repositories were considered, but there's still much more data hiding in there.
 

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 Hello, I am Book.
 
-You already know the twat who created me. He's the guy who can't keep his shit together long enough to start a business. That foreword you just read was all him. Idiot.
+You already know the guy who created me from that foreword, you might think he's silly, but he's alright.
 
-But I am Book! You will like me. 
+I am Book! You will like me. 
 
-It's going to take about <time> to read me through, but take it easy. That's just a suggestion calculated by some weird piece of software some guy probably wrote when he could barely see through the haze of caffeine.
+It's going to take about an hour, fifty-three minutes and nine seconds to read me through, but take it easy. Or fast. Either way, I suggest a nice cup of tea and a comfy chair.
 
-I don't trust software. But I do trust developers, programmers, software engineers or however else you want to call them. Those guys seem to change their preferred noun every two weeks.
+I am here to tell you I love programmers. Even though they sometimes prefer to be called developers, or software engineers, or computer scientists. Whatever _your_ favorite version likes to call themselves, go give them a hug. They're awesome folk!
 
-Have some tea. Or coffee. Glass of water?
-
-I'm going to teach you about being _the best_. The best programmer, or the person programmers like best. I have no idea which you need more, so I'll just show you both.
+They might seem a bit strange at first, but I'm going to help you be _the best_ person for programmers to be around. If you happen to be a programmer yourself, I'm going to tell you how to be the best programmer there is.
 
 ## Keep in touch
 
 Swizec is starting a newsletter about the things from Book. He's going to share interesting things about productivity, programmers, office culture and stuff like that about twice a month.
 
 Sign up at: [http://swiz.ec/nightowls-list](http://swiz.ec/nightowls-list)
 
-You can also poke swizec on Twitter as [@swizec](https://twitter.com/swizec) or send him an email at swizec@swizec.com. He loves hearing from people.
+You can also poke Swizec on Twitter as [@swizec](https://twitter.com/swizec) or send him an email at swizec@swizec.com. He loves hearing from people.
 
 ## Whom Book is for
 
-You should read me if you are a programmer or have to deal with those weirdos all the time. If you have to wait until 11am for your favorite programmer to show up at work, or your favorite programmer won't even come to bed until 3am regardless of how sexy your lingerie. Read me!
+You should read me if you are a programmer or have to deal with them a lot. If you've ever waited until 11am for one of them to show up at work, or couldn't get them in bed until 3am no matter how sexy you dressed. This book is for you!
 
-If you're a mum or a dad and your young padawan of a programmer is acting strange - stays up all night and sleeps through school. I'll tell you why. And no, it's not drugs, it's pure awesome.
+If you're a mum or a dad and have a pup programmer in the house, don't worry. I'll tell you all about why they stay up all night and sleep through school. It's because they're doing awesome things in their spare time ;)
 
-If one of your parents is a programmer and they keep making strange jokes. *"Yes mum, we know! The two hard things in computer science are cache invalidation, naming things, and off-by-one errors. Ha ha."*. I'll help you understand that one too.
+If one of your parents is a programmer and they keep making corny jokes like *"The two hard things in computer science are cache invalidation, naming things, and off-by-one errors. Ha ha."*. I'll help you understand that too.
 
 ## What Book contains
 
-I'm made up of roughly four sections.
+I have roughly four sections.
+
+First I'm going to talk about whether programmers do in fact work at night or do they just like to think they do. For some reason they really like bragging about how little sleep they got last night. Swizec is just like that!
 
-First I'm going to talk about whether programmers do in fact work at night or do they just think they do so they can brag for hours on end about how little sleep they need.
+Then I'm going to tell you _why_ they feel night-time is best time. Some things in the day-time just don't gel well with those guys, understanding will help you keep them at a minimum.
 
-Then we're going to go through some of the reasons they feel like night-time is the best time. I'll tell you what's going on and what's so hard about working during the day.
+Lastly, there's going to be practical stuff. Both for people around programmers as for programmers themselves. The very last section might be called *"Lifestyle tips for top productivity"*.
 
-Lastly, I'm going to share some practical stuff aimed at people who aren't programmers, but have to deal with them and some other stuff for programmers so they can get along with normal people better, or just get more out of the night.
+Everything you read here has been tried by somebody. Either Swizec or some of his close friends. None of that writing things that sound good on paper, but nobody can do. Only things that work are allowed.
 
 ## What is not in Book
 
-I am not hard science. You should take everything you read here with a grain of salt. While that Swizec guy did read a lot of academic papers on most things in here, he's also based a lot of it off anecdotal evidence and his and his friends' personal experiences.
+I am not hard science. Take everything with a grain of salt, if something seems strange, tell Swizec. If something doesn't work for you, tell Swizec. If something sounds downright dangerous, tell Swizec.
 
-He also sucks at keeping proper track of references. I try to smack him over the nose with a newspaper every time he cites something from a paper, but doesn't cite it properly. He rarely listens, but promises he'll try his best to get all of that in place.
+You should consider me a collection of anecdotes, personal experiences and interpretations of scientific literature on the topic.
 
 ## How finished is Book
 
-Swizec is lazy - he prefers the euphemism "busy" - so it's taking him forever to finish me. It feels like I'm missing a whole body! I want one of those lovely figures you see on TV ...
+Swizec seems to have a life outside this book so it's taking him a while to finish. You might still find some notes to himself, usually inside square brackets, or sections that clearly haven't seen an editor yet. He's very sorry about that and promises to get to it as soon as possible.
 
-If you are reading via [the Github repository](https://github.com/Swizec/nightowls), that's wonderful! Make sure to tell him what's wrong! Github Issues exist for a reason.
+If you are reading via [the Github repository](https://github.com/Swizec/nightowls), that's wonderful! Make sure to tell Swizec what's wrong! Github Issues exist for a reason.
 
 If you're reading via purchased pdf, that's _awesome_! You are a gentleman and a scholar and a great person to boot. Swizec asked me to say thanks for supporting the project.
 
 Right now I'm version 0.4.
 
-The interesting sections right now are **About flow** and **Working with programmers**. There's some interesting science about creativity and sleeping habits in **Why programmers work at night**.
+The most interesting sections are **About flow** and **Working with programmers**. There's some interesting science about creativity and sleeping habits in **Why programmers work at night**.
 
-The section of tips _for_ programmers was mostly written during long drives on a road trip around Europe. It's very interesting, but that lazy bastard still hasn't finished editing.
+The section of tips _for_ programmers was mostly written during long drives on a road trip around Europe. It's all very interesting and is probably the most well researched part of the book. But Swizec still needs to mark up the references and clean up the writing.
 
 If you're into data, you should check out the preliminary analysis in **Do programmers work at night?**. Some 500,000 Github repositories were considered, but there's still much more data hiding in there.